tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6705138931532479252.post583136032782173327..comments2023-06-04T08:39:02.288+01:00Comments on a little light in london: The Dance : FictionUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6705138931532479252.post-65839842974556900712011-07-14T07:39:13.830+01:002011-07-14T07:39:13.830+01:00You wanted honest feedback, and as I suspected the...You wanted honest feedback, and as I suspected there is very few sour pieces in this bit for me. I loved it quite honestly. The first paragraph or two seemed stuttered, but I think that was nerves (like your subject character). Some of the sentences could have flowed a little better...but all in all this was a beautiful piece of writing. I felt like I was stepping right along with her, getting more excited as she let herself fall into the dance. :)<br /><br />Wonderful!Kristi Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02947272576758594705noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6705138931532479252.post-66441533393548053722011-07-14T03:46:26.514+01:002011-07-14T03:46:26.514+01:00I loved this. I felt the passion so deeply, as we...I loved this. I felt the passion so deeply, as well as the insecurities of both characters. You made them so relatable. And I loved the way you described each character's building confidence. Beautiful!Laenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06955406779571623288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6705138931532479252.post-67978033092102624812011-07-13T19:43:50.808+01:002011-07-13T19:43:50.808+01:00Absolutely loved it. Have come back to read it mor...Absolutely loved it. Have come back to read it more than once. Brilliant.light208https://www.blogger.com/profile/08963433460783023131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6705138931532479252.post-56310027154832123352011-07-12T23:01:35.627+01:002011-07-12T23:01:35.627+01:00This was just great. Really invigorating to read....This was just great. Really invigorating to read.BBhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09432729957196570774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6705138931532479252.post-70004096615832340572011-07-12T22:27:14.299+01:002011-07-12T22:27:14.299+01:00As I said to you on Twitter, I absolutely love thi...As I said to you on Twitter, I absolutely love this post. I love your non-fiction posts but this fiction post is captivating too.Happy Frog and Ihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02679066739313347920noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6705138931532479252.post-1869221541805595562011-07-12T17:33:11.908+01:002011-07-12T17:33:11.908+01:00over via eryl's and very glad, sugar! your wri...over via eryl's and very glad, sugar! your writing very much summed up dance, and new dancers, for me. the story read the same way it feels to be a new dancer dancing with a master. well done you! xoxsavannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04310843901371718758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6705138931532479252.post-91991975277560098162011-07-12T17:28:10.367+01:002011-07-12T17:28:10.367+01:00This is lovely writing, and for a first attempt qu...This is lovely writing, and for a first attempt quite astonishing. <br /><br />That certain Mr Dodd sent me, and I'm glad he did.Erylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06008344023000459577noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6705138931532479252.post-70273063796527030002011-07-12T09:54:25.938+01:002011-07-12T09:54:25.938+01:00Wow....just wow....beautifully written...Wow....just wow....beautifully written...caterpillarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16929070939893449116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6705138931532479252.post-147028395710054612011-07-12T09:42:34.347+01:002011-07-12T09:42:34.347+01:00This is an amazing story and I loved it. I love al...This is an amazing story and I loved it. I love all the details and the description is simply perfect. You're very talented and I can't wait for your next fictional story.Starlighthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12744373842226110455noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6705138931532479252.post-63423544675198922562011-07-12T09:10:27.766+01:002011-07-12T09:10:27.766+01:00That was every bit as good as I thought it was. Yo...That was every bit as good as I thought it was. You're an absolute natural. I'm so pleased you did this.I liked your choice of subject and you did it well. Describing from two perspectives at once isn't that easy. Great first two lines which enticed us in but didn't gave the game away. I thought other bits of the first para were a bit halting, like you were nervously pawing the ground a bit, but once you got going I thought you really did it justice. I'm really looking forward to more. Tell me how it made you feel whilst writing it, I'm interested.Philip Doddhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13164671362164285231noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6705138931532479252.post-5518323954363386112011-07-12T05:44:36.545+01:002011-07-12T05:44:36.545+01:00Bravo!
I loved this - thank goodness you listened...Bravo!<br /><br />I loved this - thank goodness you listened to Liam and that strange Philip bloke...<br /><br />More stories please.Sharon Longworthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18120227975152565893noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6705138931532479252.post-72644927949236824942011-07-12T00:45:25.846+01:002011-07-12T00:45:25.846+01:00Incredibly well done.Incredibly well done.Hillaryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14281480044634094336noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6705138931532479252.post-90722607251686944392011-07-12T00:03:30.421+01:002011-07-12T00:03:30.421+01:00You must love to dance, as I can see the floor, he...You must love to dance, as I can see the floor, hear the music and smell their passion.Shopgirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06435291786820680344noreply@blogger.com